Writing About Your Work · 关于你的作品写作
| English | 中文 | Pinyin · 拼音 |
|---|---|---|
| written evidence/ˈrɪtn ˈevɪdəns/ | 书面证据 | shū miàn zhèng jù |
Short, factual, load-bearing
- The written evidence 书面证据 is short, factual, and load-bearing — it directs the scorer's attention (CED 3.D/3.E).
- State the inquiry as a question or clear statement in the first sentence.
- Use concrete nouns and verbs: "compressed charcoal on gessoed cardboard, lifted with erasers" beats "mixed media".
简短、实事求是、承重
- 书面证据(written evidence)简短、实事求是、承重——它引导评卷人的注意力（CED 3.D/3.E）。
- 第一句就把探究写成一个问题或清楚的陈述。
- 用具体的名词和动词："石膏底纸板上的压缩木炭，用橡皮提亮"胜过"综合媒介"。
Written evidence completely unrelated to the works ____ the Selected Works score. · 与作品完全无关的书面证据____选定作品分数。
Relevance is a rubric rule — unrelated writing caps the score. · 相关性是评分标准规则——与作品无关的写作会封顶分数。
"Compressed charcoal, lifted with erasers" is better than "mixed media". · "压缩炭笔，用橡皮擦提亮"比"混合媒介"更好。
Concrete beats vague. · 具体优于模糊。
Connect writing to visible things
- Connect the writing to visible things: if you claim experimentation, the images must show it.
- Writing completely unrelated to the works caps the Selected Works score — relevance is a rule.
- Never claim a skill or process the picture does not display.
把文字连到可见之物
- 把文字连到可见的东西：你声称实验，图像就必须显示它。
- 与作品完全无关的文字会封顶精选作品的分数——相关性是规则。
- 绝不声称图里没有显示的技能或过程。
Strong writing or vague art-speak? · 有力的写作还是模糊的艺术术语？
Sort each sentence by whether it does scoring work. · 根据每个句子是否起到评分作用对其进行排序。
Select all · 所有 features of strong written evidence. · 选择所有强有力书面证据的特征。
Generic art-speak scores nothing. · 通用的艺术术语不得分。
Draft early, cut hard
- Draft early and cut hard — character limits reward the specific and punish the vague.
- Have someone read the writing while viewing the images; wherever they ask "where?", revise.
- Every sentence should tie to something in the pictures.
早起草，狠删
- 早起草、狠删——字符上限奖励具体、惩罚空泛。
- 请人边看图边读你的文字；凡是对方问"在哪里？"的地方，就修改。
- 每句话都应连到图里的某样东西。
If your writing would fit another student's portfolio unchanged, it is too ____. · 如果你的写作可以毫不改动地用于另一个学生的作品集，那它太____了。
Tie every line to your own images. · 将每一行都与自己的图像联系起来。
Match the writing to its quality. · 将写作与其质量匹配。
Specific and visible wins. · 具体且可见胜出。
Generic art-speak — "I explored my emotions through visual language" — could sit under anyone's portfolio and scores nothing. If your writing would fit another student's work unchanged, it is too vague. Tie every line to your images.
泛泛的艺术腔——"我通过视觉语言探索我的情感"——放在任何人的作品集下都行，得不到分。如果你的文字原封不动放到别人作品下也说得通，那就太空泛了。把每一句都拴到你的图像上。
Weak: "I experimented with different materials to express feeling." Strong: "I ground charcoal into wet gesso so the marks sink in and blur, echoing how the memory itself is going soft." The second names material, process, and idea — and points at the image.
弱："我用不同材料实验来表达感受。"强："我把木炭磨进湿石膏里，让笔触陷进去、变模糊，呼应记忆本身正在变软。"第二句点名了材料、过程和想法——并指向图像。
Written evidence is short, concrete, and load-bearing: state the inquiry, name materials/processes/ideas in the CED's words, tie every line to a visible thing, and cut anything that could fit another student's work.
书面证据简短、具体、承重：陈述探究，用CED的原词命名材料/过程/想法，把每一句都拴到可见之物，删掉任何能放到别人作品下的话。