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A grammar repair cannot supply a missing request
- Weak email: “We have a problem with the room. Please do something.” A useful revision is: “Room 204 is closed on Saturday. Could you confirm a replacement with tables by Thursday?” It supplies problem, requested action and deadline.
- Changing “The tables is needed” to “The tables are needed” fixes agreement. It still does not name which room, when it is needed or what the recipient should confirm. A beautifully conjugated mystery is still a mystery.
Specificity must come from the task
- “With the development of society” is grammatical but gives this booking office no useful information. Replace a generic opening with a concrete purpose grounded in the scenario, not with an invented cause, survey or deadline.
- If the situation also requires step-free access, tables alone are insufficient. Add the access requirement to the request. Do not invent a participant’s disability unless given; state the required room feature directly.
Why is 'With the development of society' a weak opening here?
The phrase is grammatical, but a specific first sentence would move the answer forward.
Plain language should preserve the claim
- As a standalone language comparison, “Cost fell sharply after 2015” states measure, direction and time more explicitly than “There was a considerable diminution in the pecuniary outlay.” It is not evidence that costs actually fell in the library-map discussion.
- For that discussion, explain the proposed trade-off: an app can update routes while entrance maps help visitors without a working phone. Do not add an unsupported numeric saving merely to make the paragraph sound precise.
Which sentence states the change and its time more clearly?
'Cost fell sharply after 2015' identifies the measure, direction and time. The longer sentence does not.
The phrase “cost fell sharply after 2015” supplies evidence that the library app reduced costs.
It is a standalone wording comparison, not task evidence or measured data.
Join ideas when the relationship is clear
- “Room 204 is closed. We need another room” becomes “Because Room 204 is closed on Saturday, we need another room for the workshop.” Because makes the reason explicit; extra length alone does not improve the message.
- Read subject and verb together: “The tables are needed”; “The list of rooms is attached.” Keep the intended meaning while fixing local language. This is revision practice, not a rule that every short sentence scores above every long one.
Making a sentence longer automatically makes the meaning clearer.
Length does not show the relationship between ideas by itself. Join ideas when the connection matters and stays clear.
Let the missing requirement set the final check
- With sixty seconds left and all required ideas present, reread for articles, plurals, verb endings and unclear references. If the required replacement request is missing, add it first; polishing an opening cannot replace task fulfilment.
- If the prompt changes to require a reply by Wednesday, update Thursday to Wednesday. Check the latest situation rather than reusing a memorised model. The best next edit depends on the actual omission, not a universal final-minute script.
The required ideas are already present and sixty seconds remain. Which final pass addresses local language errors?
If the required ideas are already present, a final read-back can catch fixable errors without adding an unplanned sentence.
There are sixty seconds left and the required replacement-room request is missing. Which edit addresses the omission?
Required content comes first; a grammar-only pass cannot supply the request.
The new prompt requires a reply by Wednesday. What must change in the model request with “by Thursday”?
Respond to the current task facts rather than a memorised deadline.
Read back as the recipient
- Ask: can the office identify the problem, choose a room with the requested features and know when to reply? Then check clarity, organisation and language. For a discussion, ask whether the claim responds to the question and develops a viewpoint.
- Recap: task facts → actionable content → clear relationships → language check. Task descriptions checked on 2 October 2026: ETS Writing overview. These original repairs carry no promised official score.
Match the three distinctions from the worked case.
Now check grammar without losing the request: “The tables are needed” is clearer than “The tables is needed”. Fix a local error after ensuring the reader knows what to do.
What is missing from “We have a problem. Please do something”?
Weak request: “We have a problem with the room. Please do something.” Stronger request: “Room 204 is closed on Saturday. Could you confirm a replacement with tables by Thursday?” The revision names problem, action and deadline. Now check grammar without losing the request: “The tables are needed” is clearer than “The tables is needed”. Fix a local error after ensuring the reader knows what to do.
Complete the worked-case label: Room 204 is closed → ____. Use the phrase in the diagram.
Check task fulfilment and meaning, then organisation and language; keep the specific action visible.