One sentence in three is the one that scores
- The CED's statement of a body paragraph is exact and worth memorising word for word.
- The body paragraphs of a written argument make claims, support them with evidence, and provide commentary that explains the relationship of the evidence to the claim.
- Three parts, in that order, every time.
A claim and its evidence without commentary are two people pointing at each other, waiting to be introduced.
Part one: the claim
- Narrower than the thesis, still arguable, and specific enough that your evidence bears on it.
- It usually opens the paragraph, though it need not.
- If it could open any paragraph in the essay, it is too vague to direct this one.
本論段落の三つの部分をCEDの順序に並べ替えてください。
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すべての本論段落に、その順序で三つの部分组成。
Part two: the evidence
- Embedded in your own sentence, not announced and then quoted.
- Chosen for a stated reason, not because it was available.
- Long enough to carry the point and no longer.
この文はどの部分ですか？
本論段落におけるそれぞれの役割によって文にラベル付けしてください。
When an AP Language essay loses evidence-and-commentary points, it is almost always because paragraphs that have a claim and evidence have no commentary. That is the third part, it carries most of four rubric points, and it is the one students skip.
解説（Commentary）は説明すべき...
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証拠を再述することは要約であり、関係を説明することは解説です。
関係を強制する解説の導入語をすべて選択してください。
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"The quotation says" は再述を招く；他の三つはリンクを求める。
大部分の証拠と解説の失点率は、証拠のない段落から来ます。
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主張と証拠はあるが 解説がない 段落から来ます。
Part three: the commentary
- Explains the relationship of the evidence to the claim — not what the evidence says.
- Begin it with a word that forces a link: because, which means, so, the effect of this is.
- This is where the marks are, and it is the part students leave out.
主張を読み、証拠を飛ばして解説を読む——それでも ____ はずです。
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解説が引用を見ながらでなければ意味をなさない場合、それは要約です。
The one-minute check
- Read your claim, skip the evidence, read your commentary. Do they connect?
- If the commentary only makes sense with the quotation in view, it is summary.
- Fix it by asking: what does this evidence let me say that I could not say without it?
"The scheme's own report shows completion falling from 62% to 48%" is evidence. "Which means the scheme lost precisely the students it was funded to keep — so its own measure records the failure it was meant to prevent" is commentary. The second sentence is where the marks are.
Every body paragraph makes a claim, supports it with evidence, and provides commentary explaining the relationship between them. The claim is narrow and arguable, the evidence embedded and chosen for a reason, and the commentary begins with a word that cannot be followed by a restatement.