Finish this sentence before you use anything
- I am using this piece because it ...
- If you cannot finish that sentence, the evidence is not chosen — it is available.
- Evidence chosen for a stated reason produces commentary almost by itself.
Choosing a quotation only because it is nearby is like hiring the first person in a queue as your expert witness.
Three good reasons
- ... it illustrates a claim that would otherwise stay abstract.
- ... it establishes credibility on a subject where readers may doubt you.
- ... it connects your position to a value the audience already holds.
なぜこの証拠が選ばれたのか？
各証拠を、それが地位を得る理由に対応させよ。
証拠を選ぶ理由は…になるべきだ。
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書くのが最も難しい文は、証拠を選択する段階で既に存在していた文である。
このレッスンが示す、証拠を選ぶための良い理由をすべて選択せよ。
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長さは理由にならない；各証拠は他が担わない仕事を担わなければならない。
Cutting evidence
- Under time pressure, more evidence feels safer. It is not.
- Each piece you keep must earn the space with a job the others do not do.
- Two pieces doing the same job is one piece and some wasted words.
時間制約下では、証拠を増やす方が一般的に安全である。
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同じ仕事をする二つの証拠は、一つ分の点数しか得られず、Commentary に必要なスペースも消費する。
More evidence is not safer. Two pieces doing the same job earn the marks of one and cost you the space that commentary needed — and commentary is where four of the six rubric points live.
各状況を、証拠を選ぶ理由に対応させよ。
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聴衆の障害が、どの証拠が地位を得るかを決定する。
From reason to commentary
- The reason you chose the evidence is the first sentence of your commentary.
- "I chose this because it shows the cost was known in advance" becomes "This matters because it shows the cost was known in advance."
- The hardest sentence to write turns out to be one you already had.
____ を飛ばして主張とCommentaryを読み進めよ——それでも両者は結びつくべきだ。
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Commentaryが引用なしでは意味をなさない場合、それは要約である。
A check before you move on
- Read the claim, then the commentary, skipping the evidence entirely.
- Do they still connect? If yes, the commentary is doing its job.
- If the commentary only makes sense while looking at the quotation, it is summary.
A student cites three statistics that all show the same decline. The second and third add nothing the first did not, and the paragraph runs out of room before any commentary appears. One statistic and two sentences of commentary would have scored higher.
Choose each piece of evidence for a stated reason — to illustrate, to build credibility, or to connect to a value the audience holds. That reason becomes your first commentary sentence, and two pieces doing the same job earn the marks of one.